Talk:Secrets of the Cavern/@comment-35137341-20190109221207

As a judge, I must critique all the stories so far:

Great storyline! You should be proud of this. However, it would be even better if you used commas and cleaned up the punctuation scene a bit. It is also a bit confusing because there are fragments as well. Over here: 'She could feel the sharp pain each throughout her body' does not make sense to me, as 'each' could be removed.

Overall, great job, and I hope to see more!