Thread:TurquoiseEmber/@comment-38217640-20190119002140/@comment-35137341-20190119214821

You painted a beautiful picture with a girl loving a girl, taking this day and age into account. The adjectives were vivid, and made it enjoyable. However, as critique: I would like a more thorough description of what their kiss was actually like. You could say it was soft, violent, long..or you could go deeper and go poetic. The reason I'm asking for this is because you simply just ignore what the kiss felt like, and I as a reader would like a description on how the kiss felt, because Mia and Julie did seem to enjoy it.

If you purposefully left out the description of the kiss, apologies for not realizing it!