Talk:The Hidden Ruins/@comment-38158014-20190316140451

I really like how you put in Shadowseer's point of view. Not only that, but her chapter is infused with a young-dragonet feel, which really gives her a sense of personality.

I have a nitpick, though. You write:

"My parents never loved me.

''Maybe my mother did, but she was always busy, making this, fiddling with that. She was a a scientist, you see, and an excellent one at that. Joy was always busy, since the queen had ordered her to find out and test something, so she simply had no time for me.''

''Father,however,was a different story. He openly hated me, since I was a girl, and he wanted a boy. I hated him too. Why did it matter what gender I was? Who cared?''

If you are writing multiple paragraphs the same person is saying, quotation marks go at the beginning of each paragraph, and at the end of the entire section. Like this:

"My parents never loved me.

"Maybe my mother did, but she was always busy, making this,fiddling with that. She was a a scientist, you see, and an excellent one at that. Joy was always busy, since the queen had ordered her to find out and test something, so she simply had no time for me.

"Father,however,was a different story. He openly hated me, since I was a girl, and he wanted a boy. I hated him too. Why did it matter what gender I was? Who cared?

And then at the end of Shadowseer's passage:

"For the last few months I've been exploring Pyrriha, and that's why I'm here."

If you're still confused, read this.

Overall, really good job!! I'm definitely following this.