Talk:The Beginning of the End/@comment-37335257-20191207220929/@comment-37335257-20191209025440

The pause definetly added a more realistic tone! (No hate on your earlier work tho.)

There's not really anything else I'd suggest. Maybe Christopher butting in or something? I also think that Mr. "I'm a Horrible Dad" would maybe lecture her more? Like, maybe don't write it, but add something along the lines of "Anna's dad lectured her more, before forcing her upstairs." Then her whole taking the knifu thing.

Just a suggestion, because I have a friend who has a friend who this happened to so...?

Your story tho, do whatever you want.

To quote MacDonald's- "I'm loving it!"