Thread:Jaguar Satake/@comment-39375566-20190710233031/@comment-39375566-20190711005208

maybe change His father had some sake, and Akira had some apple juice he was pretending was sake.

to

His father had some sake as Akira pretended his apple juice was sake.

idk actually the sentence i just wrote was rly bad,,

YOU DESRICBE STUFF REALLY WELL,, AND UR WRITING IS VERY GOOD!! W R I T E  M O R E

but no pressure lol