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Here are two examples I wrote (mostly following my guide):

Example 1 (Past Tense, 3rd Person):

The bright sun shining through the dappled leaves made intricate marble-like patterns on the mottled ground. The loud, rambunctious sound of a boy exiting the forest, to enter the nearby town, echoed across the tall mountains that surrounded the valley on all sides. The boy appeared eleven or twelve, he was mostly freckles, though some patches of olive skin did show, he was quite short, had a head of untameable hair and piercing blue eyes. His nose was slightly crooked, the result of a very hard punch, had angular features, and upswept, lobe-lacking ears. Just on the border, a voice came from somewhere behind him, “Aware thee, young elf, danger lurks with the hounds of the cities.” Ignoring the voice, the elfling allowed a bird to land on his head, and smoothed its feathers. There had been a shift in the wind, and it had taken a slightly sharper edge, a herald of the coming cold-spring, the season where crops died and animals fell asleep for many months.

Example 2 (Present Tense, 1st Person):

The sun is now shining bright in my eyes, irritating really. I am an elf prince, well, in my dream-state, in reality I am just a gnome, similar to a short elf, with a flat nose, too many spots and blue eyes, not that I can properly tell, as I’m mostly blind and only seen my reflection in rippling water. A voice says to me now, “Aware thee, youn...-” I ignore the rest, stupid tree thinks I’m an elf. A bird lands in my hair, I’m almost home now, so I smooth the bird’s feathers and tell it to fly, else my pappi will eat it. The wind picks up and gets colder, damn wind, no proper food for months because the gusts will eat the seeds, like they always do.