Thread:Skyfire111/@comment-39024013-20190522073810/@comment-39024013-20190522075458

I loved your changes in writing! Good job! My only critique is the bird part. I didn't understand it that well, although it could be because I'm a bad reader, but either way, add or take away a sentance or two to make it more...fluent? I dunno. But besides that, this will make a fine edit for your story, and I can't wait to read more!