Thread:Toastedkorekiyo/@comment-37930514-20190621233554/@comment-39375566-20190621235424

prob change have to had, and maybe add like in the second setence at the end "but i stuck with them" or add the last sentence there instead?? but

i really like your writning style as well as the usage of an a snake digging its fangs to represent how they felt. its very,, flowly and nicely written, it seems very real. unlike my writing which i s choppy but o well